Tutor vs Therapist’s English

The Speech Language Pathologist (SLP) in training wrote a very interesting paper, so much fun to read.  But the good old comma and assorted unclear phrases meant that a Writing Consultant will always a bit of Speech & Language to analyze

  • The role of the SPL is to ensure something.
  • Who is enacting the prevention activities?
One of the roles of speech-language pathologists working in early intervention is to ensure prevention activities. One of the roles of speech-language pathologists working in early intervention is to ensure prevention.
  • Since we just cut the word ‘activities,’ it has to be added to the next sentence.
  • Parallel Structure makes a list easier to read
  • Also, a list of three items will need commas, not ‘and and’
  • This, that,* and the other 
  • (*Some people don’t bother with that last comma, AKA the Oxford Comma, but it adds clarity)
They are used to reduce the risks of potential problems in communication and feeding/swallowing disorders and to promote healthy development in children. Prevention activities are used to reduce the risks of potential problems in communication, in feeding/swallowing disorders, and in promoting healthy development in children.
  • “Besides for” is a colloquial phrase, not good for a formal paper.
  • Also, who is implementing the activities? Passive voice is weaker than Active tense.
 Besides for using prevention activities in traditional settings such as clinics, they are implemented into community settings as well. Besides using prevention activities in traditional settings such as clinics, SLPs implement them into community settings as well.
  • Passive voice again.
Moreover, when services are team based, it can be ensured that they are comprehensive and coordinated. Moreover, when services are team based, the team can ensure that they are comprehensive and coordinated.
  • A parenthetical explanation needs commas on both sides of the phrase.
  • And a list of three – no, eight –  needs that last comma.
SLPs contribute to the team which include professionals from different fields, to help children with communication, speech, language, cognition, hearing, feeding/swallowing disorders* and social/emotional behavior. SLPs contribute to the team, which include professionals from different fields, to help children with communication, speech, language, cognition, hearing, feeding/swallowing disorders, and social/emotional behavior.

 

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