First version: Boring. Contains the passive verb ‘are’ and the negative ‘no’. Does not contain imagery. No cars are coming from either direction. Second version: Imagery. No passive verbs, no negatives. The drowsy road stretches for empty miles in each direction.
Editing my own short story, and trying to figure out what I meant when I typed: He had very little time to finish his self-appointed task anyway. Why would I use the word ‘anyway’ in this situation, it doesn’t make any sense for the character or the scene! Read it once, read it twice, and… Read More Dear Dyslexia, quit already.
The Story of an Hour, by Kate Chopin – a perennial favorite. My own perennial favorite: Commelina communis, or the Asiatic Dayflower. Happily, Student has most excellent ideas to write about – we will work together to tidy up the grammar so the ideas get the most excellent grade they deserve. “The Story on… Read More Abandon All Commas, Ye Who Enter Here
Writing a classroom scene. “Next week, on Wednesday, our class will go down to the meadow at the riverside to pick flowers and braid wreathes to give our families and friends. Remember to where clothing that are fit to kneel in the dirt, as that is wear the flowers grow.” Penny’s classmates giggled, and so… Read More Where, wear? There, their.
Rewriting Takes Place AFTER Writing Hurray, the story has hit its very first “my story is awful” milestone! I know they’re going to come up, but these moments still manage to surprise me. Every time. It’s like it never happened before. So happy, not happy. Is the middle of chapter 7 early enough to decide… Read More Lucky Penny Milestone
… Because There Can be Only One, right? There can only ever be ONE RIGHT ANSWER. Argh. Variations on There Can be Only One I tried hard to be able to come to New York. Immigrating was not easy. I had to work hard to immigrate. It took a lot of effort to immigrate. Only… Read More The One True Way of Rephrasing
Writing is hard: True fact. You have to organize your thoughts more clearly than if you were just talking, because when you talk you can backtrack and fill in details that you left out. Writing has to be more organized than that. The first draft is allowed to be a mess! Student tried to get… Read More The Dreaded First Draft